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Meggi
03/25/2018 - 03:01 PM
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8.5Scent 9Longevity 8Sillage 8Bottle

Gone

It was dusk. He stood on the grimy, soot-blackened pavement and watched the departing carriage. Now and then, powerful clouds from the chimneys of the nearby factory obscured his view, but even in those moments, the clattering of hooves, like a merciless clockwork, steadily pierced through the sudden silence and gradually faded.

She was gone. Her father had come in person to 'bring her to reason' and she had obeyed. Perhaps she had truly been too refined for this narrow and stuffy area, mostly shrouded in dense, heavy, greasy smoke. The smoke that testified to the dominance of industrial rhythm, to which life here was subjected, and which now reluctantly receded as the night shift came to an end. Only on Sundays did the hustle and bustle of the factory rest, granting a few hours of reflection.

The unusual silence of the machines roared in his head, numbing his senses. In a corner of his consciousness, he noticed that the silence smelled different today than usual. Spicier. Sometimes, towards the end of the last shift of the week, firewood was thrown into the insatiable chimneys to avoid having to extinguish the embers of expensive coal at the appointed time in the morning.

He must have stood almost motionless for a long time, kneading the coarse fabric of his cap in his hand, for now the sun sent its first rays through the dissipating haze. He turned around and walked away. Not back into the confines of her…his shack. No, a solitary walk would be better. As if by itself, his steps carried him toward the small forest. There, only a smoky hint would be felt, and the scent of the trees might do him good.
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28 Comments
FloydFloyd 5 years ago
Sensational!
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SeejungfrauSeejungfrau 5 years ago
Industrial rhythm. **Grandiose** scent description.
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KovexKovex 6 years ago
I think I like the scent ;)
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AchillesAchilles 8 years ago
Fantastic. Every aspect of the scent is captured. I perceive it exactly as it is.
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SerenissimaSerenissima 8 years ago
Despite your somewhat smoky-dark description, this scent seems very appealing to me; I think it will be an interesting experience to explore it more closely (thanks to you).
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Sweetsmell75Sweetsmell75 8 years ago
Yeah, sad... poor guy :(
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IngerInger 8 years ago
Sounds great - but I'm just waiting for spring and the sun - floral - bright - fresh!
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ErnstheiterErnstheiter 8 years ago
A scent like the Industrial Revolution in the first half of the 19th century, then?
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PaloneraPalonera 8 years ago
Finally, a fragrance that makes you want to write. Really write. Wonderful.
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PlutoPluto 8 years ago
The ingredients sound great, and your comment does too. Is the scent a bit balsamic as well?
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KleopatraKleopatra 8 years ago
Well written! But there's nothing about all that smoke in the fragrance pyramid!?
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MarWicMarWic 8 years ago
Sad-beautiful, your comment- I can totally see why you like it...
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TorfdoenTorfdoen 8 years ago
He could challenge the industrial exploiters for their firewood supplies as a smoky Robin Hood. Then he might also meet his Maid Marian. Theoretically.
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Can777Can777 8 years ago
I want to go where the factory is! Or I’d rather try the scent out. Great story behind it!
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FirstFirst 8 years ago
Sounds like the London of Charles Dickens...
Very well written!
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MokkaMokka 8 years ago
I have to go too. The forest is calling.....
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MisterEMisterE 8 years ago
And it's gone......
the scent should be your style.. Based on the notes, I would have expected it to be similar to Fuocco Infernale....???
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KylesaKylesa 8 years ago
A beautiful but also very sad story. I'll remember the scent...thank you very much :-)
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SeeroseSeerose 8 years ago
It's also a scent I don't need. But the story is good.
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YataganYatagan 8 years ago
Super strong description! Very well done! The scent was exciting!
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ExUserExUser 8 years ago
The scent might appeal to me. The story without a happy ending is quite melancholic. But true love can overcome even this hurdle.
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TaurusTaurus 8 years ago
On The Road ... sounds kind of crazy ... :-)
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JumiJumi 8 years ago
Very vividly described. Sad, it leaves no room for a flowery happy ending. Although the forest at the end brings hope back...
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GelisGelis 8 years ago
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Where is all that smoke coming from? According to the fragrance pyramid, there’s only the birch that could really bother me.
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ErgoproxyErgoproxy 8 years ago
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I thought it was nice, but I probably wouldn't wear it often enough.
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EtamherEtamher 8 years ago
Sad story - but there are plenty of those today (in a "different" way). The scent doesn't seem to be the issue, according to your review. Does the Peru balsam get lost in it (which I really like)??
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JensemannJensemann 8 years ago
Yeah, I really liked that one too! It's on my wishlist!
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MeggiMeggi 8 years ago
I thank Mokka for the sample.
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